| Name |
Views and Comments | Date |
| passion |
love your story and keep it going |
11/21/2009 |
| Meearb |
wow! what a story i think you should better consult with some psychiatrist. |
11/21/2009 |
| shorty |
awsome stories |
11/12/2009 |
| Joyce Bryant |
Love it ur a really good writer i am a vampire lover good wook cant wait 2 read more!:) |
11/6/2009 |
| india |
you need to write more i can not keep my eyes off |
11/3/2009 |
| india |
IT WAS CRAZY HOT I FELT LIKE I WAS HER JUST WANT TO BE LOVE BY A GUY WHO CARE FOR ME BUT THIS IS THE REAL WORLD AND THAT WILL NEVER HAPPEN TO ME EVEN WHEN I DREAMED SAD FOR ME. |
11/1/2009 |
| lilcc |
i lov this storie so much! |
11/1/2009 |
| margaret |
omg. LOVE IT
I LOVE YOU |
9/30/2009 |
| Mickey |
very good be sure to write more |
9/16/2009 |
| tyra |
amazing you should become an author girl u rock |
9/4/2009 |
| jenny |
totall rubbish! if u want a vampire story read twilight not this crap |
8/25/2009 |
| chelsie |
its not good. simple as that. its too unrealistic something my 9year ols niece would come up with. its written really badly and has no sese of adventure or romance or nething! |
8/25/2009 |
| pandora |
its...welll...urgh! i mean come on if sum1 sed im a vampire staying in a homeless vampire shelter ud laugh at them. im sorry but maybe u shud think more about it being realistic |
8/25/2009 |
| abbey |
this is good i liked it |
8/20/2009 |
| Sea-Breeze |
REALLY GOOD! |
8/6/2009 |
| Anali |
I LOVED THIS STORY! its is my second fav vampire story next to the twilight saga. Have youever thought about making it longer and publishing it? YOU SHOULD! :) |
7/2/2009 |
| Kaitlin |
I think it was awesome! I love it. Most of the time when i read vampire books i think they're over the top, but this is just the best! |
6/18/2009 |
| vampyra |
i love vampire stories i haven't read this one but i would like to it looks good |
6/2/2009 |
| maichi |
thias is a vety googd charter |
5/21/2009 |
| abe |
it was a good chapter... but i need the book to know the holl thing |
4/4/2009 |
| jenny |
this chapter is awesome and i think it gives alot of detial and thats a good thing. |
4/1/2009 |
| Tina000 |
I Think It Is A Lovely Story. I Just Wish You Gave A Better Story About Her Life Before She Met Him. |
3/19/2009 |
| Jessica |
Twilght is much better |
3/3/2009 |
| Sylw |
wow, nice!
now if only you'd develop this a bit more, you'd be on your way to a book length story! |
3/2/2009 |
| stacey |
nice story |
2/25/2009 |
| tiffany |
soo coo0l |
2/16/2009 |
| sierra |
wow that was really good
got any more stories? |
2/16/2009 |
| louise |
omg thats so good, there may be heaps of vampire stories but urs is by far the best |
2/11/2009 |
| Sadlinia |
I think its awesome but dont forget to put much feelings in that story TAKE CARE NOW BYE BYE THEN `.` |
1/11/2009 |
| mem |
i loved it!my b day is in 3 more das (dec 28 1992)i'll be 17 teen! |
12/25/2008 |
| Lulu |
I think that if you added more details about your characters especially, than it would be better. When her mother dies, ofr instance, make us see her with her mother on the deathbed. Make him meet her right after that. Make us care about you characters. That's the most important piece. We have to care about the people and right now we've got a list of events, which are interesting, but would be even more so if you gave it a lot of emotion. |
12/6/2008 |
| Charlotte |
I Like This A Lot. It Is Interesting. I Have Always Been Interested In Vampires But I Never Knew That There Was Someone Out There That Liked Vampires As Much As Me. I Want To Become A Vampire But Everytime I Tell Someone This They Look At Me And Laugh And Say 'There Is No Such Thing Charlotte' And Shake There Head ANd Walk Away. But I WILL Find A Way To Prove Them Wrong And I WILL Become A Princess Of The Darkness! |
12/4/2008 |
| Tianna |
i like this story it is good it reminds me a little of twightlight but way differnet a love story thou! =D |
11/4/2008 |
| Rose |
This is just not good writing. You need to lay down more descriptive dialogue and make it less difficult to read- also, talk about WHY he thinks your character is worthy of being a vampire queen. Instead of saying "pun for sex", try substituting the word "euphamism". Him calling himself a "prince of darkness" sounds ridiculous, and work on using better grammar. (ie- the sentence about him getting you punch). Also, make your foreshadowing less obvious.
Or you could just do us all a favor and drop the keyboard, back away from the computer, and take up knitting instead. ;) |
10/31/2008 |
| flap61 |
ew |
10/22/2008 |
| Isabella |
Not bed but you could probably add more detail in you story. Not that i don't like it. Like you could describe how he looked and how his skin felt on yours they way his lips pressed agents your neck. How he smelt. But if you like Vampire love stories you should check out the books Twilight,New Moon,Eclipse and Breaking Dawn. by Stephenie Meyer. |
10/16/2008 |
| sharan Laws |
I liked it. you need to keep writting and know you are good |
10/10/2008 |
| Lisa |
cool |
9/26/2008 |
| MusicHottie |
wow, that was real good! |
9/23/2008 |
| gith |
maybe she call fall in love with one of his clan mates instead of him... |
9/23/2008 |
| vmpgrl |
god i luv this!
:)!
im probalby going to put MY book on this buzzz website type thing, or whatever it is!
hope you read it!
i mean its not hardly as good as yours, but i hope you read it anyways.
by the way,
its called forbidden kisses.
:) |
9/6/2008 |
| XoXo |
its...way to predictable, too much cheese. maybe you should try to base it what YOU would do in that situation. it really makes stories more realistic. |
7/14/2008 |
| kaiitlyn |
is this a realll book? |
6/4/2008 |
| Jameia D. |
Nice, I love Vampire romances, but it seems pretty stereotypical to me, no offense intended I am just saying what I think. |
5/28/2008 |
| VAMPIRA |
ehh..it souned like u took it from "Interveiw With A Vampire" i think u could do better.. |
5/18/2008 |
| vampirica |
Very well planned out, a truely meraculouse story, there are very few like it, but if you don't mind I would like to suggest to you out of my sencere like of this story, if you would put more detail into it. I can not tell you what to detail more on, because it is your story not mine, so I will leave it of by telling you that it was such a good read for me. |
5/10/2008 |
| Hidden |
way too awesome |
5/2/2008 |
| bella |
it was..... interesting. very dark slightly cisturbing but i liked it :) |
4/21/2008 |
| lakesha |
that was really good im also writing a story also entitled the vampire's love except that it is like totally different |
4/19/2008 |
| victoria |
awsome |
4/12/2008 |
| BooBoo |
It was weird |
2/24/2008 |
| filmgirl101 |
wow I really liked that! |
2/12/2008 |
| cal |
wow this is amazing its jsut great writing it gives me chilld 2 read but I just couldnt stop i had 2 c how it ended. whitch means it is writen by an amazing author! |
2/9/2008 |
| DeathIsEternal |
Vampire's dont have Fangs , but I actully did enjoy reading this short chapter , Thank you
Xx |
12/26/2007 |
| love vampires |
i liked it alot but dont worrie ur not the only one who has fell in love with a vampier im in love with one now and he is my world |
12/12/2007 |
| Jalisa |
What a very sweet, dark story i really enjoyed i've always searched for a dark and yet sweet story. |
10/25/2007 |
| Boredperson=( |
Though i dont read vampire love stories or anything gothic (i'm not a goth or a emo) it was very interesting and well written. GREAT JOB!=)
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7/4/2007 |
| sabrina |
this is so cool |
5/29/2007 |
| kirsten |
it was interesting |
4/30/2007 |
| Climclop |
there wasn't much suspense at the end, but i really liked it anyway. It's not the best I've read, but it's definitely up there, keep writing ^_^ |
4/20/2007 |
| M |
it sounds interesting |
3/29/2007 |
| Miranda |
OH MY GOD! i love vampire lov eit is like, the best story ever! |
3/13/2007 |
| adrena |
i love read about vampires because it is good |
3/10/2007 |
| jac |
wow! this is really good |
3/4/2007 |
| Act |
Not too bad for a begining of a story. |
2/20/2007 |
| Hannah |
Cute, but a bit predictable... Seems rather rehearsed also, but I shall read on before I make anymore assumptions. |
12/21/2006 |
| Bec |
wow...so nice...the story is so...real... |
10/4/2006 |
| Maharani |
Vampires are so cool.
They fill my heart with lust and passion.
So good for you. |
10/2/2006 |
| Maharani |
That's cool.
You should make more.
Like a book or something. |
10/2/2006 |
| Lezia |
well that was great..i loved it.. |
10/2/2006 |
| amandalynn |
i thought that that was a great way of introducing people to what lies in the shadows of the night, not daring to come out without a proper introduction of fangs, blood, romance, and love. bravo! |
8/23/2006 |
| amandalynn |
i thought that that was a great of introducing people to what lies in the shadows of the night not daring to come out without a proper introduction of fangs, blood, romance, and love. bravo! |
8/23/2006 |
| nobody |
i always like Vampire's love story. because it mixed the evil feeling and a romance feeling together. all of this feelings can show the true love that every humen been seach for a long, long time. i very appreciate it. |
8/18/2006 |
| nette kahn |
I think that is the coolest story i've heard, I try to write a story like that but I perfer reading other peoples storys. IT ROCK'S!!! |
8/15/2006 |
| shelby |
I loved it. You should make a book or something; I know I would read it non-stop! I'd live for that kind of adventure. I to would say yes and with no regrets to. The life style seams so incredible, I always wanted a life like that. |
8/2/2006 |
| sarah |
that was a very touching story i wish i could be a vampire but i am only 12 so? I can only hope that when I grow i will get bitten! |
6/20/2006 |
| LilJuNeBuG |
This story is awesome, you are very talented. My friend and I are currently working on our own Vampire Story, at this point we have about 262 pages. It is a complex story of two teenage vampires that happen to meet two teenage girls, that are best friends. One girl loves day dreaming about the undead while the other hates even the idea of it. The story is full of different characters including a ghost, a warewolf, and a secret cult of vampire hunters that are soon to learn of the vampires, I should maybe see if I could find somewhere I could add a dragon, lol. Well, keep writing. |
6/16/2006 |
| Sarah W. |
This story is awesome, you are very talented. My friend and I are currently working on our own Vampire Story, at this point we have about 262 pages to the story. Keep writing. |
6/16/2006 |
| rachel 13 |
o god this is awesome im writing a vampire story too! mine is about a vampire prince thats looking for a queen and when he finds a human lover to be his queen,she turns him down.im not plagerizing! this is the first time ive been on this sight.your story is awesome. |
5/31/2006 |
| MIdge Maire |
WOW!!! That was WONDERFUL!!!! |
4/29/2006 |
| harriet |
i'm 12 and i wanted to know how it feels to have your period... Can someone please tell me? |
4/15/2006 |
| Bree ♥ |
well, i like my storys better but hey like yours. and at least you have the guts to let everyone read yours. |
3/31/2006 |
| me |
kewl. really kewl. yay for vampires |
1/22/2006 |
| darkmind |
i love it is wose very good |
12/14/2005 |
| emma |
it was awsome i love it its the stuff i love to read |
11/30/2005 |
| goth_rose_666 |
this is kelsey leonard im glad you enjoyed the 1st chapter of my book and want to continue reading it if anyone wants to put it on their website you have my permission as long as you use the whole book and my name as author |
11/24/2005 |
| harriet |
thanks
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10/10/2005 |
| harriet |
i think that it is great, i would love to add it to my website. the hole book that is. if you dont mind. |
10/10/2005 |
| harriet |
i think that it is great, can i copy it. im only 12 |
10/10/2005 |
| vampress anis |
its very good. would love to post it on my site if ok with you. thanks
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9/29/2005 |
| Christie |
Oh my God that is going to such a SWEET book to read and i have read a lot of vamp books and this one sounds really goood |
8/11/2005 |
| amanda |
not bad |
8/10/2005 |
| Trinety |
that was great you should be a writer. the passion in the story it filled the empty ness in my heart. I am also writing a Vampire love story, I am having trouble with it. I cant seem to keep going. writer block go figure. My e-mail MoonFire_ AT MSN . COM |
7/20/2005 |
| Windra |
Awww, I like it nice. |
6/7/2005 |
| Elaine Parker |
The first chapter definitely hooked me. I"m eager to continue reading to see what happens next. |
6/4/2005 |
