The Vision - New Story
This is my first story guys, so go easy but please comment and let me know everything you think about it!!!! Sorry for any errors, there will be a few!!
| Comments on article "The Vision - New Story" |
| Name |
Views and Comments | Date |
| Mouse |
general idea is good. But the writting style of yours shold have been a little better ; ) |
10/29/2009 |
| Thirza |
(here's my comment, as promised)
I like it so far, mystery everwhere ;)
The only suggestion I want to make: It might be handy to announce when you switch POV, because it can be a bit confusing.
Of course, without names, that's a bit hard, but you might concider that for the upcoming chapters.
Apart from that: Nice =) |
10/23/2009 |
| brother and me |
i love this story keep up the good work :P
oh no my brother is coming he has a coment: "i like it to your the best wrighter :D" |
8/24/2009 |
| hermosa |
i like it. please continue! It is very interesting and keeps my attention. |
7/17/2009 |
| Sweety |
Hey its gr8... its creating kinda suspense.. making me think whts gona happen next ! n wht exactly was happening all this while...
gud... keep writing please... |
7/16/2009 |
| Kayla |
I lovee it! Please continue!
I need to know whats next! |
7/10/2009 |
| gala |
Hey this is great please continue! |
7/5/2009 |
| Jess |
This is great so far! |
7/3/2009 | |
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