Zwilight (A Story about Vampires)

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Grace Lol! Awesome! You've got a lot of haters dude, but hey, haters ganna hate cause some ones gotta do it! 11/25/2011
leialk WHAT? 11/24/2010
lisa s ahahahahaha 10/9/2010
kitty223 I want muffins ! :D wish i had that koolieo of a mom 7/21/2010
Fortune Cookie. It's not bad at all, it's actually quite funny! I love a good Twilight parody.

It just gives me the impression that you're trying a little too hard. When done right, I suppose that that can contribute to style...but still, try to let it come more naturally. Your story would have been fine without all of the curse words, for example. I'd have probably laughed harder without them, really.

And no, I'm not some freakazoid who's all..."bad words are sinful, sinful, SINFUL"...they can liven up a piece quite well. There were just so many, and they weren't really spaced out...again, it was like you tried a tad bit too hard.

So, that would be my tip...let things flow a little more naturally, and your pieces will be amazing :D.		 11/4/2009
Lizzie LOL I love twilight but I have to admit that was freaken funny stella is like buffy and bella and tedward is like edward and some idiot clumsy vampire I like it it's funny keep writing the parody I want more you so totally keep going with it you know make it more funny 7/25/2009
Hahah Hmm well you seemed to know to name Zwilight, a letter away from Twilight. Wasn't the character's name Tedward? It's pretty similar without the backround story and you know it. Tedward is a vampire too. Maybe you hadn't meant to mock it but you did. 7/19/2009
Malika Hahaha this is funny. I read the Twilight saga and I am a fan of it. Anyway this piece of work gave me a great laugh. :D 7/12/2009
Ben D. I wasn't mocking anyone's writing. I just thought it would be humorous to do a take-off of the Twilight story. People do parodies of things all the time. I've never read any of those books or seen the movies but as far as I know, NONE of what I wrote was even CLOSE to anything that happens in any of the Twilight stuff so whats the big deal. I was trying to be funny. Maybe I failed, who knows. I wasn't trying to infuriate Stephanie Meyer or her fans everywhere lol Relax. 7/12/2009
Hahaha I'm only 15 by the way. And I do have a life, I just like a really good fight too. :) I wasn't making fun of your writing just because of a fight or because I secretly enjoyed it. i was trying to prove something. You got offensive of my own comments so don't you think it's offensive of you to mock Stephenie Meyer's work? It'd would've been funny if you had made it your own story, a complete original. I'm not going to disagree you have talent, so try putting that talent into your own work. You wouldn't want people mocking you're writings or telling you how bad you are, would you? And please don't try to say that it has no effect on you what others think and that what you did to Stephenie and I did to you is a complete difference. 7/10/2009
sapphire Very funny. I like it!^-^ 7/10/2009
Wanda It was okay... In fact, it was actually quite funny, I’ll give you that. But firstly - you're just making a mockery out of a good book (and no, I'm not just saying that because I "love" vampires - I personally think that book would have been good without vampires, with just the romance and the drama) and secondly, you’re making a mockery out of people who are enthusiastic about reading and writing fantasy/romance stories. There's plenty of other stuff to do when you're bored that you can do instead of being derisive and disrespectful to other people and their work. Why is it pathetic and worthy of "getting a life" if someone enjoys reading and writing? Just because you don’t enjoy those sorts of stories, it doesn’t mean that they’re not good or that they deserve to be ridiculed. And as for your comment to a person who actually dared to voice their opinion to you, you assume "most everyone else" thinks you’re funny, you probably are, but you should stop being funny by mocking others’ work, it’s rude and disrespectful and you’re not better than anyone else.
If maybe your attitude had been a little more considerate and not so scathing, I think I would have enjoyed this a lot more.		 7/3/2009
the clockmaker vampires are stupid! funny story though! lol 7/1/2009
Patrick I must admit,i laughed the entire time XD It was EPIC 7/1/2009
Ben D. lol All I can say is; Read all the other people's comments who liked it and everything else that I write. I got fans! so I must be doing something right. I actually think I'm pretty damn funny, as does most everyone else. I think what happened is I apparently insulted your devoted love of vampires. lol go back to your book. I also think it's funny you actually checked back to see if I responded. I'm only on here while I'm at work cause I'm bored. You apparently get on here as an evening activity. lol so why dont YOU get a life. :) 7/1/2009
bigbums good one... 6/30/2009
Ben D. lol thanks for the feedback. you obviously liked it or you wouldn't be commenting. And I'm actually just out of my teens, thank you very much :) 6/30/2009
hahaha what is this? this is horrible! this is terrible no wonder your writing has never been published. you're so old so why dont you get a life and a real job instead of imagining this great life inside your pathetic mind? 6/30/2009
Faith. Hahahah, awesome. 6/29/2009
JKYLIE haha that was hilarious; poor tedward lol 6/29/2009
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