Ones Broken Soul
Break ups suck
| Comments on article "Ones Broken Soul" |
| Name |
Views and Comments | Date |
| S.M.D.S |
I think these words are very powerful, and made me think after I read each line. thanks |
8/2/2009 |
| Catherine |
hey guys thanks for all the feedback ... and billie am soo sorry 2 hear about your fathers passing...but in reply to myriads comment ...thanks for the feedback but it isnt a school report and the structure in witch i have used wasnt suppose to be technical or anything like that it was just what i felt and at that time thats how i felt i wanted to express it ...anyways thanks every1 for taking the time to read my poetry and hopefully i will be able to add more entrys soon. ...thank u take care |
5/18/2009 |
| Tohoma West |
i liked it. |
5/15/2009 |
| ;)bLoNdY |
love the poem! please write more id love to hear them |
5/9/2009 |
| billie bailey |
i know what u are talking about. i am 14 years old and i lost my father on 4/12/08. and every day it hurts and stings, he died of dieabetis (type 2) in his sleep around 1 o'clock. Thank you. |
5/8/2009 |
| Myriad. |
The rhyming scheme seems a bit simple/flippant, which, given the subject matter, you could argue is a little inappropriate. The title adds to this; is it purposefully lazy? Or is that to make a point?
A good movement to a sense of transcendance with the last line, and this thankfully undercuts some of the more apparent cliche's present in the poem, I'm afraid. |
5/8/2009 | |
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