| Name |
Views and Comments | Date |
| mymelody |
very good! you should make chapters about this one. it is very interesting and makes e feel like im there. again, good work! |
11/17/2009 |
| Sara M |
a good story ! i got some words for my story |
11/9/2009 |
| lahiru |
good |
10/27/2009 |
| honky |
Great...i will always wonder what happened excellent ! |
10/22/2009 |
| maria |
girl that shouldn't be the end youshouldtry to continue it. this piece is great is intriging. I want to know what happens to her. please hear me out and try to continue. please! please! please! please! |
9/30/2009 |
| akanksha |
nice story do keep it up...entertaining |
9/30/2009 |
| lol smiley face |
It was good although i did not understand one word |
9/29/2009 |
| Tom Douglas |
An interesting experiment. I doubt most American readers would care for it though ... we like to have loose ends tied up, and this story has neither beginning nor end (just a snapshot).
I still lliked it tho :) |
9/25/2009 |
| josy |
u should it finish it! |
9/24/2009 |
| teashan |
i think it is agreat story but we need to know whats going to happen in the end but the stort is great so far |
9/23/2009 |
| EMILY |
THRILLING , YOURE A GOOD WRITER KEEP ON GOING |
9/1/2009 |
| delores |
i started getting the chills. pretty good! |
8/28/2009 |
| natasha |
this story is very good. but i think you should write more |
8/28/2009 |
| . |
huh? |
8/20/2009 |
| Whooo |
nice! liked it.. ALOT |
8/13/2009 |
| daerick |
nice ..story... |
8/7/2009 |
| Eric |
not bad, maybe there should've been more suspense. It was a bit predictable. But i liked it a lot. |
8/3/2009 |
| angel |
not interesting ... the story is boring... |
7/31/2009 |
| abby |
very chilling i think you should write more of these kind of short stories it makes lots of people get the creeps but wonder wats next |
7/31/2009 |
| sona |
gud startin bt shd hav gvn it a detailin... in d mid way... gud odrwise... |
7/10/2009 |
| emz |
curiosity kills the cat...she deserve it!
the story is not that scary but its good |
7/8/2009 |
| emz |
curiosity kills the cat...she deserve it! |
7/8/2009 |
| xx |
Umm...typical plot much. while descriptive, is written in a juvenille sounding way. Instead of weaving things in discretely, you have stated them too obviously making it weak. |
7/6/2009 |
| Lesley |
I really like the style of writing, I was interested in the story straight away. |
6/24/2009 |
| Daniel Stephens |
Good ending. House feels like house on haunted hill. Creepy. One thing U Couldve made the horror suspence at the end, gone for a little bit longer. But over all good storie |
6/22/2009 |
| Faishiafu |
I'm sorry, Crying Rose, the last post was supposed to have been posted to you. Samaria, I apologize to you also. |
6/16/2009 |
| Faishiafu |
Samaria, it was a good, scary story, however, you need to support the comments you wrote with fact. For instance, about rumors of the house being haunted. What were they? Why did they say it's haunted if it's only inhabited by black shadows? |
6/16/2009 |
| Sohrab |
Hey, a good one, but it was Really short... |
6/2/2009 |
| lilly |
ahh it was ok i guess but not very interesting..i mean getting lost in a world of darkness? |
5/29/2009 |
| Deidre |
it had me sitting on the edge of my chair! great story, wish it was longer thoug |
5/27/2009 |
| leatherface |
goood story |
5/24/2009 |
| Unnamed |
This is a great story though. You're not that bad at writing man! |
5/21/2009 |
| alexandria |
this story is really good. |
5/18/2009 |
| Lela Schnacker |
I thought it was good |
5/13/2009 |
| shobha |
i was not scared much. |
5/9/2009 |
| pavithra |
it was quite good |
5/6/2009 |
| watever |
whoa dude! dat waz AMAZING...no really it waz very cool! KEEP UP DA GREAT WORK! |
5/2/2009 |
| Kelly |
GOOD Describtions of house, darkness, feelings, however ending leaves reader unsatisfied. |
5/1/2009 |
| Samaria |
The story was pretty good...is there going to be a second part to it? I really hope so! |
4/29/2009 |
| Crying Rose |
hey thanks everyone for your advice, i appreciate it. as for the ending, that was the whole point, i know some might think it to be anti climatic but i kinda liked it and it went will what i wanted, i write on feeling if you know what i mean. lol just a useless bit of info but it was initially an assignment i was given for class. thanks though. mwa |
4/29/2009 |
| Sammy |
I, too, think that you should write a different ending. It's anticlimactic. To calm for such an amazing, elaborate build up. |
4/29/2009 |
| Stravaganza |
wow, you write amazingly well! You should consider writing a book. I read your Taken stories, and those are also well written. They're fun to read, which is the important thing. |
4/29/2009 |
| Bri |
Good story. I would change the ending into something a little bit more freaky.
ex. someone started choking her; elaborate on that.
hearing screaming, she goes to check it out; elaborate on that. |
4/27/2009 |
| jen |
The story started out good just needed a better ending. the end didn't seem like an ending at all |
4/25/2009 |
| Shayne Sager |
Interesting Story. |
4/23/2009 |
| mary |
very bad , i dont like it |
4/23/2009 |
| Marco |
Pretty good story, I presented it in class and everyone was hooked right from the start... Good Job... |
4/22/2009 |
