Archon of Strife: Segment Nine

Moving the story back to Daldenvale, the reader observes as Rashida disciplines her commanders and attempts to quell the onset of mutiny. --I haven't spent as much time refining this segment, but I'm going to try to be writing and submitting more often and I'll have to accept that it can't all be perfect. One thing I'm asking myself is if there's too much death and violence, and what can I do to solve this if so?
Comments on article "Archon of Strife: Segment Nine"
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Author Hallelujah! Somebody cares enough to leave a comment! Looks like I'll have to start putting up segments again... actually I could probably have three or four up by the end of the week since I have Wednesday and Friday off so keep your eyes open. And thanks for saying something, I was arbitrarily checking the site from time to time, all the while thinking nobody was reading these anymore. 7/14/2009
Daniel I realy like your work, i found this site by accident and i must admit that you realy are a great writer, hopefully we (I) can read more at a later stage. 7/13/2009
author I don't know if anyone noticed that nothing new has been submitted, or if anyone even cares, but i haven't been getting any feedback and that was the whole point of showing this to other people-to get opinions and critique. So if you want to keep reading then help me out and leave some comments! 4/19/2009
author I can't stop laughing at the fact that more people have voted than I have gotten for page views on this segment. Is this because you guys feel the need to select a poll choice that makes you smile as well as one that gives your opinion, so you're voting more than once? 2/2/2009
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