Behind Blue Eyes - Chapter One

A murder mystery...
Comments on article "Behind Blue Eyes - Chapter One"
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veronika this story is good 5/19/2009
evans great start. work on dialogue. its not very natural and flowing. 2/26/2009
mAtt It's alright so far. I will continue to read more. I do think you should research and use real terminology. For example use the appropriate name for "the crime scene guys." Little things like that will give the story more detail and make it more believeable. Keep writing. Do not give up. 12/16/2008
AGGY ita awesome 9/29/2008
teiinah MOUSUMI YOU LIAR I'M SURE YOUR JUST KIDDING

NAH JUST JOKING YOU ARE THE BEST.		 9/9/2008
teiinah i think that this story was a bit boring becoz its just not that scary and not sounding like a investigating murder. but yeah i know that you can do better. 9/9/2008
Mousumi Excellent start.. nice blend of professional and personal feeling.. getting interesting 8/14/2008
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