Killer Night
A girlfriend going out with her new boyfriend. They are having the time of their lives, when suddenly it turns dark. The girl meets her untimely demise in the hands of someone very unsuspected.
| Comments on article "Killer Night" |
| Name |
Views and Comments | Date |
| Linda |
Yes, well written. |
9/15/2009 |
| kanupriya |
Not bad! |
5/29/2009 |
| Mel |
How is this a mystery? There is no plot, no character development, no nothing. |
2/8/2009 |
| boyzrock |
kinda short but its good.keep on writing and i will read it |
2/2/2009 |
| olivia |
worst thing ever written. "...i bled to death," i mean come on, there is such thing as a narrator, write in a narrator's point of view! |
2/1/2009 |
| Suparna |
really nice story, but too short. |
1/23/2009 |
| David Olasoko |
i have the story
SKiller Night
A girlfriend going out with her new boyfriend. They are having the time of their lives, when suddenly it turns dark. The girl meets her untimely demise in the hands of someone very unsuspected.
We drove up to the local beach, me and my boyfriend Roy Manson. He stopped his 2003 Night Blue Lexus convertible then Roy and I stepped out. We gently closed the car doors in unison and Roy grabbed the cooler from the truck before we slowly walked down to the beach. I smiled at Roy this was our 7th date so far.
We sat down close to the tide and gazed up at the thousands of stars in the night sky. There weren’t any buildings around here so nothing prevented us from really enjoying the beautiful night sky, and each others company. Roy got out two bottles of beer from the cooler. He cracked both of them open before handing me one.
"You know Roy, This is so romantic!" I said and took a drink of beer. I looked at Roy’s eyes glittering in the moonlight.
"Only the best for you." Roy smiled, "You’re nothing like my old girlfriend. She was always grumpy and demanding and snapped for no reason. She was a killer on my patience. But I handled it." Roy chugged down half his beer.
"Wait wasn’t she murdered? It was in the newspaper a few weeks ago wasn’t it?" I looked at Roy I hoped it wasn’t too emotional for him to remember. I took quite drinks at my beer waiting for him to say something.
"Yeah it’s a shame." Roy finally said with a sigh, "She was annoying but she didn’t deserve that. I hear she was beaten to death, and the police say that by the looks of things it was done by someone she knew. They never did find the killer though"
Now I was a bit creeped out myself. I cuddled a bit closer to Roy. With him here with me it was a lot more comforting. He looked at me with a comforting look and we both finished our beers.
The wind then picked up. Roy and I had left our jackets back in the Lexus. I told Roy that I’d go get them. He nodded saying that he’s a bit cold too. I got up and trekked back over to the Lexus thinking about Roy and how cute he is. He was a great boyfriend. I reached for our coats when a beer bottle smashed into my skull. I fell on the ground and bled to death.
"You’re annoying too. You talk too much!" was the last thing I heard.
The police arrived about an hour later. They looked around for evidence. All they found was the beer bottle with my blood on it and the Lexus still parked there, apparently all the information relating to the owner, including picture id was forged. They questioned Roy but he claims he broke up with me for weeks now.
Roy was at my funeral. He saw me in my casket and get put in the ground. He spoke a few words of grief to my parent. When the funeral was over he drove off in his new fire red Mustang and a new girl in the passenger seat. |
11/26/2008 |
| 3STH3R |
i thought this was a professional's work cuz i was jus roaming around then i saw this n i thought to myself this is really gudd then i saw that it wasn't a professional's work i was shocked lol but anywayz V3RY GUDD WORK keep writing n i will keep reading your stories. can't wait to hear more from u. |
11/24/2008 |
| jeovanna |
i love this story i hope theres a sequel lol |
11/5/2008 |
| steven |
it was a mediocre story, i cant really see how anyone would think this was a professional piece of writing. |
10/30/2008 |
| Lucy |
It's awsome and it also gives a lesson |
9/6/2008 |
| I'm sad now |
um... how sad |
8/27/2008 |
| Xitij |
loved it bro
brilliant stuff |
8/23/2008 |
| Craig |
I thought it wasnt to bad. It wwas defo to short and predictable but it was ok just the same. |
7/10/2008 |
| Someone like U |
At the part wher the girl went to the car for their coats.. you should have let her death lead up.. it happened way to fast. it was like..she walked up the car, died, and then the end..it was a good story though, so you should KEEP writing... |
4/21/2008 |
| A reader |
A very predictable story..
Not too bad thogh
Try harder
Good luck!! |
4/11/2008 |
| Marcela |
I think it was too short and it didn't have enough detail and enough action |
4/1/2008 |
| Marcela |
I think it was too short and it didn't have enough action |
4/1/2008 | |
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