Elisha (Chapter 2 )
Sydney has not yet answered the question, "Where is he?" Will she ever?
| Comments on article "Elisha (Chapter 2 )" |
| Name |
Views and Comments | Date |
| kt |
grammar and vocabulary, man. my best suggestion is to read more and get a better understanding of some of the verbs/adjectives you use; they're often strange choices. Your dialogue could use some work too as it doesn't always ring true or feel like a real person could say them. And I'm astounded that so many people out there online could vote that this story was amazing, because I myself could only say that it's good for an amateur sophomore highschool student. |
3/24/2008 |
| alana |
it good and yer |
3/12/2008 |
| Ana |
It is an amazing story. |
3/2/2008 |
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