Elisha (Prologue and Chapter 1)
Elisha is a vampire who comes in contact with a newly widowed human named Sydney. Enjoy how their story unfolds.
| Comments on article "Elisha (Prologue and Chapter 1)" |
| Name |
Views and Comments | Date |
| Nix |
The writing is immature but not entirely lacking. |
5/18/2009 |
| Christiane |
this story started out really good so far so please continue. |
5/19/2008 |
| rachel ferguson |
here are some more ideas for a story i have only got this far so far but you can carry on.
The front door squeaked as olive turned the brass door knob and pushed. She was not in a good mood after 2 French lessons to end the day before the 6 week holidays. As she stepped through the door her step sister jade came running up to her singing "Turn that frown upside down." Olive smiled at her for a split second then flung off her shoes and ran up stairs to her room.
Then she sore it. The thing which gave her the biggest shock she had ever had in her whole entire lifetime. Smartie her guinea pig was lying on her bed. That wasn’t what gave her the shock but the fact was that he was DEAD! She hardly recognized him as his fur had been torn from his body and ripped into shreds. His sharp blue eyes stared at the ceiling and his bones were like pins sticking though his skin.
Olive screamed so loudly that the whole neighbour hood must of heard her. Jake (her step dad) came running up the stairs and flying into her room. He was so shocked he didn’t even say a word but picked up Olive and carried her in to his room and lay her on the bed. Within a matter of seconds she fell asleep. Jake quickly cleared up the mess of fur and bones in her room and sleep in there because he didn’t want to disturb her after the shock she had just had.
The next day when Jake came home from work he was carrying a pets at home box. He walked into the kitchen and placed it down on the table. Then he went back out to the car. The next time when he came in he was carrying a big white box which had a blue sticker on the top which said "FRAGILE" in big bold lettering.
Then he sat down at the kitchen table and opened the white box
By rachel ferguson |
5/18/2008 |
| rayyan_350zatho |
your style of writing is marvellous but if you want pepole to take you seriously tone it down just a little. |
4/15/2008 |
| Ana |
I think it is perfect. |
3/2/2008 | |
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