Dream Maker
About a teenage boy who dreams. His are dreams are real and his dreams could decide the future.
| Comments on article "Dream Maker" |
| Name |
Views and Comments | Date |
| White_Knight |
Give more description on what your characters look like, make the audience feel as though they are there. |
4/5/2008 |
| John |
Yo ur story is so HYPE!!! i luv ur stories... |
3/4/2008 |
| noor |
it is funny can you write me a story for a contest please please |
1/23/2008 |
| Rebecca |
Learn proper english. There were so many gramatical errors in this story it did not make sense at all. |
10/26/2007 |
| Dawn Burnett |
Your visitor poll asks if you should write more. The answer of course is yes. If writing makes you happy, then you shouldn't give up.
I don't know what nationality you are, but I think you need to hone your command of the English language, if that is the language that you are choosing to write in.
I do think this piece of writing is confused in places, but you do have some lovely descriptive phrases. Not sure what you mean by anthracites, though. Possibly cataracts?
Keep writing. |
10/12/2007 |
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