The Crazy Child
Today was a normal day till I was walking home and on the side of the road I found a crazy child...
| Comments on article "The Crazy Child" |
| Name |
Views and Comments | Date |
| ur momma |
awesome cool weird ok boo |
11/14/2008 |
| Patrick |
right now,im going to all of her stories,and telling her shes an idiot because APPARENTLY SHE DOESENT GET IT,SHES STILL WRITING.YOUR AN IDIOT |
11/9/2008 |
| Gost listener |
I think this is pathetic...having happy endings is not a good scary story...next time,dont make a good ending. |
10/25/2008 |
| Bob |
Um, never write anything ever again |
9/28/2008 |
| Omar |
Good thing I read this. I was just about to let a red eyed Japanese girl into my house. She could have been a vampire! |
4/9/2008 |
| HorrorMistress |
lacks the ooomph. i thought it monotonous. i really cant comprehend why you would have so many coincidental instances? and you are an adult i guess...for you decided to take in the child without prior notification or whatsoever permission. |
3/16/2008 |
| Ella |
This piece lacks maturity. You have quite a few grammar mistakes as well so you might want to proofread. Also, try varying your sentence structure. Right now your story sounds choppy. The story is dangerously underdeveloped. It's too short to develop a full plot and characters. You basically skimmed over the story in a narration. Try including more details and BUILD UP to the climax! Excite your readers! This sounds like one of the role-playing plots I used with my friend when we were eight. Fun maybe as an inside thing with friends, but dull for other readers. |
2/12/2008 |
| HorrorMaster |
Oh please, that is a poor excuse for a horror story. All your stories are the same: you randomly encounter a demon of some kind with no apparent reason, you kill it randomly without any explaination and then you vow to never do it again. I think you should retire from writing stories.
Thats 3 minutes of my life i'll never get back |
1/18/2008 |
| boom boom |
ummmmmmmm..........no
precious if you're stupid. |
12/12/2007 |
| dan |
did u really even put an ounce of effort into this story |
11/29/2007 |
| Vive |
Make it more interesting and dont end it with ever again. But more detail in it and more thingd then just this. But it is a good story just reword it more. |
11/21/2007 |
| JACK |
i can see a theme emerging here! |
10/30/2007 |
| cara |
boring |
10/17/2007 |
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