You Make Me
I wrote this about my sister when she hurt me…
| Comments on article "You Make Me" |
| Name |
Views and Comments | Date |
| sam |
i feel the same towards my little sis! |
7/31/2008 |
| Jameia D. |
I get what you're saying. |
6/7/2008 |
| Erin |
i like this poem a lot. i feel this way all the time. keep writing. |
6/4/2008 |
| Cdaw |
this was......WOW....very talented! |
4/15/2008 |
| lashay |
i think that the poem was nice |
9/20/2007 |
| celeste |
thats beautifull..i really know how you feel, my sister causes pain a stress and i hate her for it but i love her!
amazing poem with great flow! |
7/6/2007 |
| Don R. Winslow |
It's a powerful poem, April. I hope that you shared this with your sister. |
6/4/2007 |
| Glass Eyes |
Thats a realy good poem. It sounds just like me. I love it. I have always wanted my mom to find me like that. |
5/12/2007 |
| Ceighlyn |
wow im only 12 years old and that was strong i hope my poems grow strong like that soon!
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4/29/2007 |
| renee' |
pretty good but you're missing words that would make it better |
3/15/2007 |
| JLeez |
Nice...
Do the last three lines make sense though? Should it be, "the worst things that I could do"?
Not criticizing just want to make sense of it. :) |
2/6/2007 |
| depth |
not bad overall
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11/7/2006 |
| Tracie |
Stuck in neutral
nowhere to go
You broke my heart
and now it shows
You said you loved me
but why did you leave
you said you understood me
but you will never see
the way I felt when you hurt me
It feels like knifes running through my heart
the pain never ends
and this is just the start
I feel the room spinning
the shadows come closer
darkness fills my eyes
pools of blood I cry
Feeling the pain
running through my veins
blood pouring out
I want to shout
You have played with my heart
one to many times
the game is over
you've crossed the line
screaming to my death
the pain is so real
you hurt me
so now you must deal
My mom found me on my bedroom floor
but it was to late
I've already entered hells gates |
10/13/2006 |
| amy |
i love this peom!! i can totally relate to it! |
10/2/2006 |
| mable |
that is the bestpoem si have every read . It fits me so well |
9/14/2006 |
| ... |
my sister makes feel like that to..... |
8/30/2006 |
| desiree |
i feel ur pain me 2 but i have 2 sis |
8/26/2006 |
| iunisi |
yea i think dis poem is pretty great! |
8/25/2006 |
| lia |
your not alone |
8/19/2006 |
| R. Lee C. |
wow I could not have said it better myself. I feel the same way. But is that your younger or older sister? mines my younger. I didn't know that any one could ever get that. I've tried to explain it so many times but no one ever understands. |
7/24/2006 | |
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