The Best of High School--- Sample Work

I just want to know if people will read this. comment. And I promise the actual story will be SO much better.
I was walking cautiously through the dew-wet grass. 'My friends,' I thought with a grin. We get into so much trouble together, but this time it'll be worth it.' Although that is the same thing I thought before the police busted us last time.

"Melanie!" screamed a voice from ahead breaking into my thoughts. "Hurry up!!

It was Parker. One of my best friends since 1st grade. He has this "bad boy" side that most girls can't resist. Although when I met him he was riding a tricycle instead of his current Harley Davidson.

"Coming!" I projected towards the rest of my friends. I ran and soon caught up with Lindsey, Mike, Parker and Marcy, Parkers girlfriend who no one liked.

"Here we are!" Mike stated proudly as we arrived at a chain link fence.
"This is it?" Lindsey asked in disgust. "I thought we were going to a factory!" As you can guess Lindsey's blonde.
Is this any good?
It's amazing!
I loved reading this
You had a good topic but it could use some work
I didn't like in my opinion
It wasn't too good I think u could do better
It was HORRIBLE!! NEVER write AGAIN!!
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Published: 9/15/2009
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