My River

I made this when I was on a plane.
It is my ideal place
To attain peace of mind
Its motion is pleasant in the ear
Because of the sound it creates

My lover and I
Met over the bridge
While listening the splash
Of the waters around us

It was my favorite hangover
Where my friends and I
To chat, play, and laugh
It was surrounded by singing birds

My lover and I met here
My friends and I fished here
The singing birds were pleasant to hear
Along with the splashes of the river
1) Are the lines too long? 2) Is it pleasant to hear?
1) Yes 2) Yes
1) No 2) No
1) Yes 2) No
1) No 2) Yes
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Published: 6/14/2010
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