Love's Betrayal - Chapter 1
This is a new story that I am working on.. Please comment and tell me how I can make it better! Thanks! Marisol goes to the Bar with her friends and meets a boy. Is he good news? Or bad? And what will happen when she gets to the Faerieland of Eve?
She finished getting ready and put on the rest of her make-up. She pulled her long, curly, red hair out of her face and into a loose ponytail. She grabbed her Coach purse and put the necessities in it, such as, her iPhone, some extra tampons, her wallet, driver's license, and fake ID.
"Ma! I'll be back later!" Marisol yelled. "Si!" her mom yelled back. Marisol ducked under the doorway and out to her car. She was a very pretty 17 year old. Very tall for her age. She had curly, red died hair, about 6'4", and had fair skin despite her being full Mexican. She had a mini, strapless black dress on.
She climbed into her shiny BMW and went to pick up her friends Carlos and Melina. They were best friends since the first grade. "Ey, Mari! Como estas, hermosa?" Carlos said buckling in his seat belt. "Bien, got your ID, feo?" Carlos glared at Marisol as she laughed. "Yea I got it," he said. "Bien" She said.
"Hola, Mari," Melina said. "Hi Melina, got your ID?" Mari asked again. Melina nodded. "Good now let's roll" Marisol stepped on the pedal and raced to The Bar. "Melina, you picture is so cheesy!" Carlos said. Melina slapped Carlos across the face and crossed her arms. "Agh! Watch it, bitch" Carlos said.
Finally they got to The Bar. The trio showed their ID's to the security and he waved them in. The place was booming with music with a lot of bass. Melina grabbed Carlos arm and led him toward the dance floor. Marisol headed to the bar and asked for a Bloody Mary.
Once she finished it she went to look for Carlos and Melina. They weren't on the dance floor anymore.She shrugged and went back to the bar. This time she got vodka. "Hey, beautiful," someone said. Marisol didn't think he was talking to her so she finished up her vodka and asked for more. "I said, hey beautiful." he said again.
Marisol finished her second cup and turned in her stool. "Oh sorry, you were talking to me?" she said. "Yea I was," he said getting closer. Once she met his eyes she was frozen. He was beautiful. His eyes were the perfect shade of green, curly black hair down to his shoulders, tall, lean, and muscular.
Suddenly they were alone. No one was there, except them. Marisol and the most beautiful guy in the world. The booming music disappeared, as well as the sweaty under dressed girls and guys. She couldn't stop staring. She just couldn't. "So what's your name?" he asked with a voice like velvet. "Mar- Marisol" she managed to say.
"Nice name," he said smiling a sweet bright smile. She didn't trust her voice so she just nodded. "My name's David," he said. Marisol smiled her best smile. "Mari! There you are! we were looking all over the place for you!" Carlos said. Suddenly everything was back. The booming music, the bar, and the under dressed girls and guys. She quickly turned around and waved them off. Carlos had one eyebrow raised and Melina rolled her eyes at him and dragged him outside.
"So are those your friends?" David asked. Marisol nodded. "They seem nice. My friends are over there trying to get girls," he jabbed his finger behind him. Marisol laughed a bit. "You seem like the quiet type," he said sliding his hand across the bar close to hers. 'Marisol, play hard to get. Don't let him think you are putty in his hands already!' She thought to herself. So she slid her hand back and jammed it on her lap. David raised an eyebrow, then chuckled. "So listen why don't you call me sometime?" he said scribbling down his number on a napkin. "We'll see," Marisol said grabbing the number and turning back around. He chuckled and left.
Marisol got up and went to the dance floor. She pushed through the crowd of girls and guys dancing, making out, and people passed out on the floor. She ran outside to get fresh air. She had enough of the smell of sweat and body odor.
She looked around for Carlos and Melina but found no one. She called Carlos's phone but it went to voicmail. Same with Melina. She went around the back to look. And sure enough, there were her two best friend lying on the ground.
"Oh my freakin God!" She yelled. Marisol ran to her friends and got down on her knees. "Ohmigod, ohmigod, ohmigod," She repeated over and over again. She calmed down once she saw the slow rise and fall of her friends' chests.
Marisol looked around making sure no one was looking. She picked Carlos up and thre him over her shoulder. Then she carefully bent down and tried to pick Melina up. She lost her balance and fell over on top of Carlos. "Need some help?" Someone asked. She turned around and it was a girl. A girl who was green. Green, tall, and extremely skinny. She also had wings. Wings! "Uhh yea please," Marisol hesitated. The green girl picked Melina up with one hand and threw her over her shoulder. Marisol picked Carlos up and leaned him on her.
They dropped them in the back of Marisol's car and the green girl hopped into the front seat. "Uumm... Why are you in my car?" She asked the green girl. She just smiled and said, "Hi, I'm Lacinda." Marisol rolled her eyes and drove off. "Mmm so it looks like your friends have been poisoned with Black Majick," Lacinda said. "What? Ok what the hell is 'black majick?" Marisol asked, eyes glued to the road. "It's majick used for evil," She explained. "But White Majick is used for good. The majick is all controlled by the queen of the seelie court. But there is also her sister, the queen of the Unseelie court. Her soldiers and citizens are evil. The White Queen as they call her, is the nicest immortal to live, while her sister, the Dark Queen, is the darkest immortal," Lacinda explained.
"Ok I get the whole majick thing now... But what's up with your skin?" Marisol asked pulling up to her driveway. "Oh right! That's cuz i'm a faerie." she said giggling a bit as she saw the reaction on Marisol's face. "Ok whatever, but how do I get my friends back to normal?" she asked. "You gotta wait a while, black majick takes a while to wear off." Lacinda said. "Okay... Exactly how long?" Marisol questioned. "Mm I'd say about a week... Maybe even two," Lacinda said picking Carlos up and throwing him over her shoulder. Marisol practically dropped Melina in surprise. "What?! That long?" she said. Lacinda nodded. "And if they don't wake up by then, well that's it for their luves here on earth," She said shrugging Carlos off and onto the couch. Marisol's eyes were so wide they almost bugged out of her head.
"You might want to go to the city of Eve to get the antidote for them," Lacinda said jabbing her thumb toward the now piled up Melina and Carlos. "Shit! Are you freakin kidding me?" Marisol half shouted. "Nope, you better get your rest. Because tomorrow we have an adventure," Lacinda said with a wink and disappeared.
"Great that's just GREAT! I have to go to a freaking fantasy land just to get an antidote?" she asked to herself, and added, "That's a pile of shit." she crossed her arms and stormed into her room and threw herself on her bed. "Well, it's gonna be worth getting my friends back." she said as she drifted off to sleep.
"Ma! I'll be back later!" Marisol yelled. "Si!" her mom yelled back. Marisol ducked under the doorway and out to her car. She was a very pretty 17 year old. Very tall for her age. She had curly, red died hair, about 6'4", and had fair skin despite her being full Mexican. She had a mini, strapless black dress on.
She climbed into her shiny BMW and went to pick up her friends Carlos and Melina. They were best friends since the first grade. "Ey, Mari! Como estas, hermosa?" Carlos said buckling in his seat belt. "Bien, got your ID, feo?" Carlos glared at Marisol as she laughed. "Yea I got it," he said. "Bien" She said.
"Hola, Mari," Melina said. "Hi Melina, got your ID?" Mari asked again. Melina nodded. "Good now let's roll" Marisol stepped on the pedal and raced to The Bar. "Melina, you picture is so cheesy!" Carlos said. Melina slapped Carlos across the face and crossed her arms. "Agh! Watch it, bitch" Carlos said.
Finally they got to The Bar. The trio showed their ID's to the security and he waved them in. The place was booming with music with a lot of bass. Melina grabbed Carlos arm and led him toward the dance floor. Marisol headed to the bar and asked for a Bloody Mary.
Once she finished it she went to look for Carlos and Melina. They weren't on the dance floor anymore.She shrugged and went back to the bar. This time she got vodka. "Hey, beautiful," someone said. Marisol didn't think he was talking to her so she finished up her vodka and asked for more. "I said, hey beautiful." he said again.
Marisol finished her second cup and turned in her stool. "Oh sorry, you were talking to me?" she said. "Yea I was," he said getting closer. Once she met his eyes she was frozen. He was beautiful. His eyes were the perfect shade of green, curly black hair down to his shoulders, tall, lean, and muscular.
Suddenly they were alone. No one was there, except them. Marisol and the most beautiful guy in the world. The booming music disappeared, as well as the sweaty under dressed girls and guys. She couldn't stop staring. She just couldn't. "So what's your name?" he asked with a voice like velvet. "Mar- Marisol" she managed to say.
"Nice name," he said smiling a sweet bright smile. She didn't trust her voice so she just nodded. "My name's David," he said. Marisol smiled her best smile. "Mari! There you are! we were looking all over the place for you!" Carlos said. Suddenly everything was back. The booming music, the bar, and the under dressed girls and guys. She quickly turned around and waved them off. Carlos had one eyebrow raised and Melina rolled her eyes at him and dragged him outside.
"So are those your friends?" David asked. Marisol nodded. "They seem nice. My friends are over there trying to get girls," he jabbed his finger behind him. Marisol laughed a bit. "You seem like the quiet type," he said sliding his hand across the bar close to hers. 'Marisol, play hard to get. Don't let him think you are putty in his hands already!' She thought to herself. So she slid her hand back and jammed it on her lap. David raised an eyebrow, then chuckled. "So listen why don't you call me sometime?" he said scribbling down his number on a napkin. "We'll see," Marisol said grabbing the number and turning back around. He chuckled and left.
Marisol got up and went to the dance floor. She pushed through the crowd of girls and guys dancing, making out, and people passed out on the floor. She ran outside to get fresh air. She had enough of the smell of sweat and body odor.
She looked around for Carlos and Melina but found no one. She called Carlos's phone but it went to voicmail. Same with Melina. She went around the back to look. And sure enough, there were her two best friend lying on the ground.
"Oh my freakin God!" She yelled. Marisol ran to her friends and got down on her knees. "Ohmigod, ohmigod, ohmigod," She repeated over and over again. She calmed down once she saw the slow rise and fall of her friends' chests.
Marisol looked around making sure no one was looking. She picked Carlos up and thre him over her shoulder. Then she carefully bent down and tried to pick Melina up. She lost her balance and fell over on top of Carlos. "Need some help?" Someone asked. She turned around and it was a girl. A girl who was green. Green, tall, and extremely skinny. She also had wings. Wings! "Uhh yea please," Marisol hesitated. The green girl picked Melina up with one hand and threw her over her shoulder. Marisol picked Carlos up and leaned him on her.
They dropped them in the back of Marisol's car and the green girl hopped into the front seat. "Uumm... Why are you in my car?" She asked the green girl. She just smiled and said, "Hi, I'm Lacinda." Marisol rolled her eyes and drove off. "Mmm so it looks like your friends have been poisoned with Black Majick," Lacinda said. "What? Ok what the hell is 'black majick?" Marisol asked, eyes glued to the road. "It's majick used for evil," She explained. "But White Majick is used for good. The majick is all controlled by the queen of the seelie court. But there is also her sister, the queen of the Unseelie court. Her soldiers and citizens are evil. The White Queen as they call her, is the nicest immortal to live, while her sister, the Dark Queen, is the darkest immortal," Lacinda explained.
"Ok I get the whole majick thing now... But what's up with your skin?" Marisol asked pulling up to her driveway. "Oh right! That's cuz i'm a faerie." she said giggling a bit as she saw the reaction on Marisol's face. "Ok whatever, but how do I get my friends back to normal?" she asked. "You gotta wait a while, black majick takes a while to wear off." Lacinda said. "Okay... Exactly how long?" Marisol questioned. "Mm I'd say about a week... Maybe even two," Lacinda said picking Carlos up and throwing him over her shoulder. Marisol practically dropped Melina in surprise. "What?! That long?" she said. Lacinda nodded. "And if they don't wake up by then, well that's it for their luves here on earth," She said shrugging Carlos off and onto the couch. Marisol's eyes were so wide they almost bugged out of her head.
"You might want to go to the city of Eve to get the antidote for them," Lacinda said jabbing her thumb toward the now piled up Melina and Carlos. "Shit! Are you freakin kidding me?" Marisol half shouted. "Nope, you better get your rest. Because tomorrow we have an adventure," Lacinda said with a wink and disappeared.
"Great that's just GREAT! I have to go to a freaking fantasy land just to get an antidote?" she asked to herself, and added, "That's a pile of shit." she crossed her arms and stormed into her room and threw herself on her bed. "Well, it's gonna be worth getting my friends back." she said as she drifted off to sleep.
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