Knight's Of Rose - Prolouge & Chapter 1

Hey guys this is what I have been working on. It's not much but it something. I am going to stop working on "Sweet Whispers" until I can decide where I want it to go. My goal is for you to enjoy what you read and I hope I can make that happen. I hope you enjoy my new story. Please let me know what you think. Thanks!
Prologue
I woke up to a very loud banging sound. I lay in bed and listened hopefully it was just the knights downstairs having a good time again. I listened harder; the banging stopped, loud screams filled the castle walls. I bolted out of bed. I cracked the door to my chambers and listened. The sounds of sword fight reached my ears. I could hear someone in heavy armor making their way up the stairs. Panic sank in, I froze. One of my Uncles Knights, injured, had made his way up the stairs. He looked at me and whispered "run".

Chapter 1

The next thing I knew I was shutting and looking my door. I put my slippers on and made my way through the secret passage way that went to the horse stalls from my room. I pulled myself on top of our fastest horse Lightning; fitting name if you ask me. He was all black and very tall. I had no time for a settle. I grabbed a handful of mane and gave him a kick. Then we were off.

We hit the forest at a dead run. It was winter and there was snow covering the ground. At least in the forest I would be harder to track. After I could no longer hear fighting I slowed Lightning down to a halt and listened.

I could hear other horses several were coming. I gave him a kick and we were off again. As the sun rose realization hit me. "we've been attacked... but why?" I whispered in my confusion. I clung to Lightning not only for riding or warmth, but because having my horse gave me comfort.

We heard them again. I say "we" because his ears alerted me. We started running again. We weaved this way and that way avoiding trees as we came at them. We were coming to a clearing so I turned Lightning abruptly. We didn't need to be out in the open. As we turned something knocked me off my horse, then everything was black.

I woke and I was in the woods. There was snow all over the ground. It was so cold but something was telling me I couldn't stay there. I had to get up, I had to get moving. I got up slowly and started walking. Not long after that I started to remember why I was in the woods.

I was so scared. I started run the thin cotton white nightgown I wore didn't help to fend off the cold. The thin slippers I wore on my feet might as well have not been there, bit I didn't dare stop. What if I were discovered... no I had to keep going.

I kept moving. Night turned into day, then night again. I could barley stay up right. I was so tired and I shivered uncontrollably. Finally my body gave out. I pushed myself up against a tree and pulled my legs up against my chest. That's when unconsciousness claimed me.
What do you think?
good
can't wait for more
needs work but it was pretty alright
bad
what were you thinking! it was terrible
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Published: 2/24/2009
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