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This is a song I just wrote and I wanted to get feedback for it. Let me know what’s up.
Weak in the Knees
Short of breath
I’ll take a risk
I’ll make a bet
I’ll take your hand
you take my neck
you watch me bleed
you watch me choke
you hear the screams
that tear my throat

Scream
forever I will (scream)
the stars right out of the sky (scream)
That blood curddling cry
Scream
Because what you did
I’ll say goodbye

Close your eyes
take a breath
like the burning of a cigarette
the pain will burn
and its here to stay
all because
what you said that day
but before I sleep
and seal my fate
you point the gun at me to take
away my pain
away my life
while you’re at it
just take a knife
and cut to bone
then at least
I’ll be at home

Scream
forever I will (scream)
the stars right out of the sky (scream)
That blood curddling cry
Scream
Because what you did
I’ll say goodbye

it’s hard to breath
without your heart
Oh my god
you’re dancing with the devil tonight

Scream
forever I will (scream)
the stars right out of the sky (scream)
That blood curddling cry
Scream
Because what you did
I’ll say goodbye
one last time

By Kaleb Bilinski
Published: 4/25/2009		 Your Contributions: Tell us a Poem! You don't have to be a Buzzle.com author to contribute to Poetry Bee. Submit a poem of your own right now!
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