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All I know so far is Vienna is a vampire slayer, with a group of other vampire slayers and soon she meets a guy...not just a guy, a vampire guy whom she falls in love with. He seems different, he knows her like no one else does...(not that far in the story at all yet)
She smoothed her golden hair, tying it back into a lopsided bun. Her bright blue eyes didn’t waver as she entered the battlefield; her opponent was the only person standing in her way to become leader.

The girl, her opponent, Julia smiled, her crimson eyes were fierce, her dark brown hair was tied back into a complicated braid. She stood on the field holding her weapon, a sword.

Vienna stood on the other side of her opponent, holding her own sword tightly, while she clenched her teeth. She sent back the same look to Julia who only smiled, mockingly; she was very cocky, to self assured. Good, she thought, good way to teach her a lesson.

"Vienna, good luck out there" her friend Alex smiled, giving her the friendliest hug then pecked a quick kiss on her cheek as he walked away. Vienna flushed a little then turned back to her opponent who only smirked "I’ll wipe that smirk off your face" she said loudly, and secretly added "and maybe cut off that pretty brown hair of yours."

Julia tensed for a moment, narrowing her gaze at Vienna then said "you know you can’t beat me Vienna" it was true, she wasn’t to self assured, she didn’t know if she could truly win but she had trained for a couple months and was ready.

Her body rippled with strength flooding through her body, the adrenaline helped her stay alert. Vienna knew she looked fragile, her body was slim, even as hard as she trained doing about 100 push ups before she slept, her body wouldn’t show the muscles, they were hidden. She didn’t look like it but she was pure muscle.
What do you think of the story?
It sucks and you should stop wriiting it
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You should continue it
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You should improve it
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Published: 3/26/2010
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